Chapter: 2
Scene: 1, (changing POVs) Kicking the Moon barroom
Combined hours: 3.5
Combined Word Count: 1698
Current Total Word Count
(including all edits/rewrites):
(I decided to use desktop snapshot image of the counter.)
Total Pages approx.: 20 ( 250 words per page)
This scene developed very differently from what I first envisioned but its a much stronger solution. When I first started, I though to show the action, Race taking Deanne as hostage etc, through Selene's eyes. But as I wrote it, it was clearly Deanne's POV. I went back and rewrote the beginning from Dea's POV, creating a intense scene , sizzling with repulsive sexuality.
Excerpt:
"You're a feisty one aren't you? I love them feisty." Race said. "They scream more in the end." He grabbed a hand full of hair, yanked her head back almost slamming it into the wood, and ran his long tongue up the column of her throat ending the journey with a deep, ruthless kiss, ravishing her lips.
When Selene and Bane enter the scene, it became a gun battle with silver bullets.
At this point (actually before this), I wondered why Vicious sent Race.
What did he want from Selene and Bane?
Why did he want Jamie alive?
(he killed off all of Selene's other relatives)
Why did he tell Race not to harm them (they don't know that yet)?
Does he want an ancient werewolf artifact Bane possessed? Maybe.
What is the artifact?
Do I want there to be an artifact? Crutch much?
But he's already pack leader. Why would he go through all the special trouble?
Suddenly, Race shouted at everyone to stop the fighting. Then he told someone named Karin to step forward. A whole new character I didn't see coming. Who is this mysterious woman with the moonlight colored hair and silver eyes?
Very surprising!
Do I want to go down this path?
Let's see where it leads.
This writing session & blog entry was made possible in part by
Battlestar Operatica from the album "Battlestar Galactica - Season One" by Bear McCreary
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